Science: Me and my DNA.

This term for science we are learning all about how the human body
works and how special we all are. We are also trying to learn how
to think and act more like a scientist. So, Miss Fletcher asked us to
look at our faces in the mirror and write down notes about what we
look like. The information had to be precise and clear so that when
someone read it, it would help them find the person it described quickly.
It was a bit like being a detective. You had to look and notice things
carefully.

Miss Fletcher said that what we look like depends on our mother and
father. Making a new human is a bit like making a cake.  You get some
ingredients from your mum and some from your dad. The ingredients
are called DNA. Everybody’s cake is different to everyone else’s. 

Miss Fletcher said the person with the most efficient description
was Andrew J as he wrote: My hair is 1 cm long all over. He is the
only student in Team Moana with a haircut like that so he was able
to be identified very easily. You can read my description below.
The sentences highlighted in blue are the ones that Miss Fletcher
said were not precise and clear enough.