Animal Town writing

This week we have used another picture as motivation for our writing. We had a story starter and then we had to carry on the story.

What I like about my writing is I have good fullstops.

I need to improve on more detail.

Here is my writing about Animal Town.

Animal town

I am going to be an animal in animal town. My  animal is a black panther. I can jump over cars and animals. I have sharp claws and sharp teeth. I can scratch the cars and the fluffy bears and trees. I can run really fast. I can splash through muddy puddles and mud. I can roar really loud. I have black stripes on me. I can scratch other animals. I have brown eyes. I can fight other animals. The zebra was too slow so I pushed it out of the way. I have a scratch on my eye. I can kill animals that get in my way. I am really strong and tough. I have a bit of brown on me.